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读后续写 人际关系类（宽容谅解a car accident）

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

The summer I turned 16, my father gave me his ’69 Chevy Malibu convertible(敞篷

车). Beautifully repainted cherry red with V8 engine—it was a gift wasted on me at that age.

What did I know about classic cars? The important thing was that Hannah and I could drive

around Tucson with the top down.

Hannah was my best friend, a year younger but much taller, almost five foot ten.

“Hannah’s a beautiful girl,” my mother always said. And sure enough, that summer she signed

with a modeling agency. She was already doing runway work.

A month after my birthday, Hannah and I went to the movies. On the way home, we

stopped at the McDonald’s drivethrough, putting the fries on the seat between us to share.

“Let’s ride around awhile,” I said. It was a clear night, ovenwarm, full moon casting low over

the desert. Making a turn too fast, I hit a patch of dirt and the back of the car slid to the other

side. I then drove through a neighbor’s landscape wall and knocked into a fullgrown palm. The

front wheels came to rest halfway up the tree trunk.

There were French fries on the floor, the dash(仪表盘), and my lap. An impossible

amount of blood was on Hannah’s face, flaps of skin hanging into her eyes. They took us in

separate ambulances. In the ER, my parents spoke quietly: “Best plastic surgeon in the

city…but it is more likely to be the end of her modeling career…”

We’d been wearing lap belts, but the car didn’t have shoulder bands. I’d broken my

cheekbone on the steering wheel; Hannah’s forehead had split wide open on the dash. What

would I say to her?

When her mother, Sharon, came into my hospital room, I started to cry, preparing

myself for her anger. She sat beside me and took my hand. “I rearended(追尾)my best friend

when I was your age,” she said. “I destroyed her car and mine.” “I’m so sorry.” I said,

knowing Sharon was trying her best to fort me and helping me out of my terrible sense of

guilt and selfblame.

Para1: “The most important is that you’re both alive. I forgive you and Hannah will too.”She

Para2: Sharon’s forgiveness allowed Hannah and me to return to our normal

life._________________

一 文章大意

我16岁那年的夏天，父亲把他的69年雪佛兰迈锐宝敞篷车送给了我。虽然我对老爷

车不甚了解，但重要的是我和我的好朋友汉娜可以开着敞篷兜风了。不幸的是，在一次

出行中，由于我的不当驾驶，导致汉娜严重受伤，这可能导致她模特生涯的终结。在病

房里，我陷入深深的内疚和自责中。这时候，汉娜的母亲来了，她尽力安慰我……

二 续写情节构建

Para1: 仔细阅读第一段提供的首句“‘The most important is that you’re both alive. I forgive

you and Hannah will too.’ She said.”，结合前文最后一段作者目前所处的情感状态，通过

对

Hannah

和她母亲

Sharon

的动作、语言等描写，体现出她们对主要由于作者不当驾驶导

致的事故结果（汉娜毁容并很可能结束模特生涯）的理性接受以及对作者的宽容和谅解

态度。因此这一段的主要情节应该是我见到了汉娜，和她母亲预料的一样，她原谅了我

（同时结合第二段提供的首句）。关键要描写出在汉娜母亲的帮助下，我见到了汉娜，

她说了什么或做了什么让我释怀，同时描写出我的情感变化。

续写第一段：场景1: “I” Sharon； 场景2: “I” Hannah

(action response) (action response)

Para2：仔细阅读第二段提供的首句“Sharon’s forgiveness allowed Hannah and me to return

to our normal life.”，抓住关键词forgiveness

，

Hannah and me

和

normal life

，

推断事故并

未对我们的正常生活造成影响。本段应该主要描写汉娜和我出院后的生活的美好画面以

及汉娜和她母亲的宽容态度对我人生的积极影响。比如，描写我们共同学习、玩耍的场

景以及我们的友谊经过时间的考验变得不断深厚等；描写我偶尔回忆起当初那场事故的

情形，汉娜和她母亲的宽容态度对我为人处世态度的积极影响等。应该突出画面和场景

以及人物语言、行动、心理等的描写。

续写第二段： 1)What a normal life did they have?

2)What about their friendship?

3)What influence does the experience have on me?

注意：

（1） 虽然原文描写的事故很严重，但从续写给出的首句推断，事故并未影响我们，尤

其是汉娜的正常生活，所以不应在续写中再过多的阐述事故和及其伤害，而应侧重事故

发生后的积极和谅解态度和之后的正常美好生活；

（2） 时态整体要用一般过去时，续写第二段的结尾如果描述现在的生活情形用一般现

在时。基于读后续写的协同效应，在本文续写中需保持与前文协同度较高的叙事风格，

不建议多用对话的形式；

（3） 主旨升华围绕“宽容谅解”的主题展开。

三 官方范文:

“The most important is that you’re both alive. I forgive you and Hannah will too.” She

said. I still couldn’t forgive myself for the harm caused to Hannah, trapped in deep

selfaccusation and regret. Aware of my desperation, Sharon took me in her arms, patting me on

the back. I plucked up enough courage to(鼓起勇气去做某事) request her to take me to

Hannah’s ward. Seeing me getting close to her bed on the wheelchair pushed by her mother,

Hannah asked eagerly, “Are you all right?” Tears of joy and relief poured down our cheeks.

Sharon’s forgiveness allowed Hannah and me to return to our normal life. We got back to

be in the car together that summer, to stay friends throughout high school and college, to be in

each other’s weddings, and to watch my four teenagers fawn over her three younger children. I

think of her gift of forgiveness every time I’m tempted to resent someone for a perceived

wrong. The scars are so faded that no one else would notice, but in the sunlight I can still see

the faint shimmer just below her hairline—for me, an imprint of grace.

注解：

fawn over sb恭维/讨好某人

tempt v.引诱，鼓动

resent v.怨/愤恨

a perceived wrong 一个显而易见的错误

faded adj.褪色的，变淡的

faint adj. 微弱的

shimmer v.发出微弱的闪光

imprint n. 印记；痕迹

an imprint of grace 优雅的标志

四 优秀习作：

“The most important thing is that you’re both alive. I forgive you and Hannah will too.”

She said. A ripple of grief and guilt crept over me and I could hardly control my tears.

Sharon’s attitude was undoubtedly beyond my expectations, which breathed great fort into my

mind.( “Everyone makes some mistakes when they are young. What matters is to take lessons

and step into your future bravely.” she said in a gentle voice.) Holding back my tears, I was

overe with waves of gratitude and made the firm resolution to apologize to Hannah in person.

With the help of Sharon, I went to Hannah’s ward and expressed my guilt sincerely. Hannah

forgave me with a friendly smile on her face.

Sharon’s forgiveness allowed Hannah and me to return to our normal life. Both of us

recovered from the terrible accident, physically and mentally. And Hannah looked as beautiful

as she used to be, except for the long scar on her forehead. We still hung out together going

shopping, having dates and driving around. But the obvious scar stayed a reminder to me,

reminding me to be responsible for the safety of my friends and me myself, and to take lessons

from mistakes, then, just as Sharon said, stepping into my future bravely.

五 语料库积累：

1）I was enveloped by tremendous guilt and selfblame. (“I”的心理描写) (envelop v.包住,笼

罩)

2）With Sharon’s help, I came to Hannah’s ward but didn’t dare to look straight into her eyes.

To my relief, she wore a smile and just said, “Nothing serious.” (Hannah的反应)

3）To my surprise, Hannah didn’t blame me and even tried to make jokes with me just as

before. (Hannah的反应)

4）It was Hannah and her mum Sharon that taught me the power of forgiveness. Today I still

keep the belief in mind that forgiving others can make oneself a better one. (感悟)

5）The scars are so faded that no one else would notice, but in the sunlight I can still see the

faint shimmer just below her hairline—for me, an imprint of grace. (感悟)

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