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2020-2021学年下学期高一英语写作衔接练（通用版）29

英语简讯+读后续写+概要写作

1．请根据以下表格内容，以A Big Forest Fire

为题，写一篇英文简讯。

写作内容：

起火时间

地点

起火原因

持续时间

参加救灾人员

死亡人员

经济损失

影响

［写作要求］：

1.

内容包括以上所有要点，书写工整，必须要有题目，全文词数100词左右；

2.

不能逐句翻译，可以对信息进行整合并用合适的连词连接

2.

参考词汇：东北 northeast

当地的 local

经济损失 economic losses

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【答案】

A Big Forest Fire

2007年4月初

中国东北部

一青年工人吸烟

约一个月

数千名解放军战士与当地群众

约200人

至少一千万元

全国震惊

A big forest fire broke out in the northeast of China in the early April. It is said that the reason for the big fire was

that a young worker smoked carelessly in the forest. As the big fire lasted about a month, several thousand soldiers

and local people joined in the fight against it .It claimed about 200 lives and a loss of at least ten million Yuan. As a

result, the whole nation was shocked by it and was thinking of the lesson of this damage.

【分析】

本文书面表达属于应用文，写一篇英文简讯。

【详解】

第1步：根据提示可知，本篇是写一篇英文简讯：请根据以下表格内容，以A Big Forest Fire

为题，写一篇英文简讯。词数100左右。时间、地点：2007年4月初，中国东北部，持续约一个月；起因：一青年工人吸烟；救援：数千名解放军战士与当地群众；后果：约200人死亡，至少一千万元经济损失；影响：全国震惊。

第2步：根据写作要求确定关键词，如：break out; It is said that; join in ; a loss of ; at least; As a result; think of等。

第3步：根据提示及关键词(组)进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态语态可题。

第4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持整洁美观的卷面是非常重要的。

【点睛】

本文内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当。另外全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。文中使用高级句子，如It is said that the reason for the big fire was that a young worker smoked

carelessly in the forest.此句运用了主语从句；As the big fire lasted about a month, several thousand soldiers and

local people joined in the fight against it .此句运用了as引导的状语从句等。

2．阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

Two men, both seriously ill, occupied the same hospital room. One man was allowed to sit up in his bed for an

hour each afternoon. His bed was next to the room’s only window. The other man had to spend all his time lying on

his back. The men talked for hours continuously. They spoke of their wives and families, their homes, their jobs, their

experience in the army, where they had been on vacation. Every afternoon when the man in the bed by the window

could sit up, he would pass the time by describing to his roommate all the things he could see outside the window. The

man in the other bed began to live for those one-hour periods when his world would be broadened and enlivened（有

活力的）by all the activities and colors of the world outside.

The window overlooked（俯瞰）a park with a lovely lake. Ducks and swans played on the water while children

sailed their model boats. Young lovers walked arm in arm among flowers of every color. Grand old trees made

everything around more attractive, and a fine view of the city skyline could be seen in the distance. As the man by the

window described all this in detail, the man on the other side of the room would close his eyes and imagine the

picturesque（如画的）scene. One warm afternoon the man by the window described a parade（列队）passing by.

Although the other man couldn’t hear the band, he could see it in his mind’s eye as the gentleman by the window

pictured it with descriptive words.

Days and weeks passed. One morning, the nurse arrived to bring water for their baths only to find the lifeless

body of the man by the window, who had died peacefully in his sleep. She was saddened and called the hospital

attendants to take the body away. Later, the other man asked if he could be moved next to the window. The nurse was

happy to make the switch, and after making sure he was comfortable, she left him alone. Finally, he would have the

joy of seeing it for himself.

注意：

1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；

2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；

3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；

4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

Paragraph 1:

Slowly and painfully, he made his greatest possible efforts to look out of the window beside the bed.

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Paragraph2:

The man was blind and could not even see the wall. Perhaps he just wanted to encourage you.”, the nurse

answered.

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【答案】

Paragraph1:

.... When eagerly looking out of the window, he was so frozen that he could see nothing but a blank wall. Sitting

there alone, he wondered why the former roommate spent time describing the lively scenes during the one-hour

periods. After a while, the nurse came in to take his temperature. “Miss, my former roommate used

to picture wonderful things outside the window to me. But actually there is only a wall outside. I just can’t understand

why he did so.”, the man asked.

Paragraph2:

.... He was again shocked and suddenly enlightened（开窍）, feeling deeply moved. He remembered how much

he enjoyed the happy moments and felt grateful. There is great happiness in making others happy despite our own

situation. Sharing grief is half the sorrow, but happiness, when shared, is doubled. Never was there another moment

when he knew so clearly what he can do to help the people around him.

【分析】

本文是一篇读后续写。

【详解】

本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，有两个同住一个病房的病友。其中一位睡在窗旁的病人会利用自己每天能坐起来的时间帮另外一个病人描述窗外的风景。终于有一天，睡窗户旁边的病人过世了，原先只能躺着的病人换到了窗户旁边的病床上。

续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：慢慢地，痛苦地，他尽最大的努力向床边的窗外看。这一段要描写他努力往外看的时候，却发现窗外只有一堵墙。他很不解为何之前的病人会花时间去描绘窗外的美景。于是他问了护士。第二段开头是：这个人是盲人，连墙都看不见。也许他只是想鼓励你。护士回答说。这段主要写听了护士的解释后，他恍然大悟。原来人和人之间是可以通过分享悲伤让悲伤减半，分享快乐让快乐加倍的。不管在什么情况下，人与人之间还是要相互帮助的。

续写时要求使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语增加了写作难度，我们要熟悉所给划线词语，恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右；续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。按要求完成写作任务。

【点睛】

文章思路清晰，语言规范，段落整齐，语篇连贯，层次清晰。使用了较为高级的句式:现在分词作时间状语：When eagerly looking out of the window, he was so frozen that he could see nothing but a blank wall.；倒装句式：Never was there another moment when he knew so clearly what he can do to help the people around him.

高级句式的应用提升了写作的档次，整个短文显示出了作者高水平的英语表达能力。

3．阅读下面短文，根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。

The British psychoanalyst John Bowlby maintains that separation from the parents during the sensitive

\"attachment\" period from birth to three may scar a child\'s personality and cause emotional problems in later life.

Some people have drawn the conclusion from Bowlby\'s work that children should not receive day care before the age

of three because of the parental separation it results in, and many people do believe this. But there are also arguments

against such a strong conclusion.

Firstly, authropologists（人类学家）point out that the isQulated love affair between children and parents found

in modern societies does not usually exist in traditional societies. For example, we saw earlier that among the Ngoni（恩戈尼人）the father and mother of a child did not raise their infant alone - far from it.

Secondly, common sense tells us that day care would not be so widespread today if parents, caretakers found

children had problems with it. Statistical studies of this kind have not yet been carried out, and even if they were, the

results would be certain to be complicated and controversial.

Thirdly, in the last decade, there have been a number of careful American studies of children in day care, and

they have reported that day care had a slightly positive effect on children\'s development. But tests that have had to be

used to measure this development are not widely enough accepted to settle the issue.

But Bowlby\'s analysis raises the possibility that early day care has delayed effects. The possibility that such care

might lead to, say, more mental illness or crime 15 or 20 years later can only be explored by the use of statistics.

Whatever the long-term effects, parents sometimes find the immediate effects difficult to deal with. Children under

three are likely to protest at leaving their parents and show unhappiness. At the age of three or three and half almost

all children find the transition to nursery easy, and this is undoubtedly why more and more parents make use of child

care at this time. The matter, then, is far from clear-cut, though experience and available evidence indicate that early

is reasonable for infants.

【答案】

Some people disagree that separation from the parents during the early years may have a bad effect on a child\'s

personality and emotion. Traditionally, such “attachment” between children and parents didn’t exist .Nowadays, day

care is widely accepted. Besides, the results of American studies show that day care slightly benefits children\'s

development. The possibility of such effects must be proved by statistics in 15 or 20 years.

【分析】

本文是议论文。英国精神分析学家约翰·鲍尔比(John Bowlby)提出观点“从出生到三岁这一敏感的“依恋”时期，与父母分离可能会对孩子的性格、情感造成问题。”但是有人反对这一结论，并提出几条有力的证据。

【详解】

第一段提出英国精神分析学家约翰·鲍尔比(John Bowlby)的观点“…separation from the parents during the

sensitive \"attachment\" period from birth to three may scar a child\'s personality and cause emotional problems in later

life.（从出生到三岁这一敏感的“依恋”时期，与父母分离可能会在孩子的性格上留下疤痕，并在以后的生活中造成情感问题。）”此段说明有人赞同John Bowlby的观点，但有人持反对的看法。因此该段主题是Some

people disagree that separation from the parents during the early years may have a bad effect on a child\'s personality

and emotion.

第二段的主题句是“Firstly, authropologists（人类学家）point out that the isQulated love affair between

children and parents found in modern societies does not usually exist in traditional societies.(

首先，在现代社会中发现的孩子和父母之间的这种浪漫的情感在传统社会中并不常见。)”该段是作者提出的关于上一段中提出的“三岁前父母与孩子分开会对孩子性格和情绪有不好的影响”的第一条反对的理由。因此该段可归纳为Traditionally , such “attachment” between children and parents didn’t exist.

第三段首句提到“Secondly, common sense tells us that day care would not be so widespread today if parents,

caretakers found children had problems with it.（其次，常识告诉我们，如果父母、看护人发现孩子（日托）有问题，日托就不会这么普遍了）”。该段是作者提出的第二条反对的理由。该句是虚拟语气，从假设的角度证明三岁前日托一般是没有问题的。

因此该段可以归纳为Nowadays, day care is widely accepted.

第四段主题句为“Thirdly… there have been a number of careful American studies of children in day care, and

they have reported that day care had a slightly positive effect on children\'s development.(

第三……美国人对日托所的儿童进行了大量细致的研究，他们的报告显示，日托对儿童的发展产生了些微的积极影响)”。该段是

作者提出的第三条反对的理由。该段可归纳为The results of American studies show that day care slightly benefits

children\'s development。短语“ slightly benefit”与“have slightly positive effect on”语义相同。

第五段主题句为“Bowlby\'s analysis raises the possibility that early day care has delayed effects. The possibility

that such care might lead to, say, more mental illness or crime 15 or 20 years later can only be explored by the use of

statistics. (但是Bowlby的分析提出了这种可能性：早期日托会延迟。日托会在15年或20年后导致更多的精神疾病或犯罪的可能性，只能通过使用统计数据来探索。)”该段是作者提出的第四条反对的理由。该段可归纳为The possibility of such effects must be proved by statistics in 15 or 20 years.

【点睛】

separation

范文要点全面，结构清晰，层次分明，上下文连贯，在表达时用到了很多高级词汇，如 disagree；from；have a bad effect on；traditionally；exist；be widely accepted；show；benefit；possibility；prove

等；复杂句式的运用提升了文章层次，如宾语从句的运用Some people disagree that …；被动语态的运用，使句式多变day care is widely accepted；过渡词的运用，使段落条理清晰Nowadays … Besides…等。

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